Why?

Why did I cry?

Why?

 

Why do I cry so many times after the sighs

I make with you between my thighs?

 

Was it your poor performance?

 

Or the lack of romance?

 

Could it be the emptiness of love

in your eyes?

 

 

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

This is so precise and yet there is such a strong voice in it that more words couldn't have done the magic...
Or the lack of romance?

Could it be the emptiness of love
in your eyes?
so powerful ans so very real...your words are as sharp as a fine knife's edge..

[Liza]

amazing revelation how a lover was physically present but emotionally absent and you felt it.

[ashley]

Much better. I don't think that last line is even missed. This is such a great poem! :D

[ashley]

Oh wow. This was good, I've felt this way before. I really like this, but I think it might be more powerful if you deleted the last line. Just a thought, either way this is great. :D