David

A poem about a little girl talking to the statue of David.

 

David

David, all others fail to

capture my gaze in the ways

that your physique does.

 

Your rounded muscles

and strong upper thighs

lead my eyes to somewhere

above the thighs,

where what hangs

so blissfully,

is such a wonder

to my young

 girly eyes.

 

Never have I seen

such a mysterious sight,

for it's usually covered

with a loin cloth.

 

You've shed light

on a lot for me today.

 

So glad I made this trip

to Florence, Italy;

it was worth the jet lag

that made my nine year old

eyes sag.

 

Not all of the little girls

back home will believe

what I saw,

when Mom's

back was turned.

Ciao!

 

Author's Note

I must have cracked my head in a bad fall to write this poem. Don't know where this came from.

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

Definitely original - hehe.
Not an experience you'd want to share with other 9 year old girls, because they might get the idea to go to Florence to see it for themselves; I don't know that their parents would share in the idea though - lol.

Nicely done. A fresh idea and written as if looking through the young girl's eyes.

btw...It's "Ciao" not "Chao" :P

[Radioactive]

Haha I just came back from Florence It. recently, and I can definitely say that there were some nine year olds who were probably thinking exactly this! Ahh David..

Great work.

XX Maddie

[Short.Nerd]

Very Nicely written. (-: This was a great poem!

[Wolfwind Words]

This was so a breath of fresh air! I can see such thoughts coming from a young girls mind at the site of that famous statue. Not only does it give us a level of realism, but it makes us smile and chuckle at the words of kids. Tis also a constant reminder that kids have minds too!

Great Ink!
Hugs!
Wolfie

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

So lovely and original!

[Julijana Velichkovska]

:)) it's a funny and cool poem! i like it!