Nothing Grew

A poem about a date.

Nothing Grew

 

Laughter broke the conversation.

Wine poured freely.

Lips smiled, feet walked, eyes shined.

Lips brushed, bodies hugged,

yet no sparks flew.

Reviews

[PadfootBlack]

Wow. Very well done, you've portrayed something huge in just a few words. Very nice.

[Liza]

uggh i know the feeling
to be present in body but not connected anyway else...

[Wicahpi]

Been there done that!!

[.]

You took us on the emotional journey with so my detail and very little words..clever

[Steve]

I have been there........well done!

[Miss Coral]

Love this! So simple, so perfect. The only thing I would consider changing is "Wine poured freely". I know it's blasphemous to add in "was"es and whatnot, but I think it might help in there.
Great piece. :)

Coral

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the hollow dance~ the paper thin skin ~the rice paper intent~

with insightful composition your poem takes compelling flight~excellent!

[Robin]

wonderful example of that missing magic