The Talisman

A creepy poem.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The Talisman Ride

The Talisman rides by my side

My life is over there’s nowhere I can hide

The lone crow does a fly by as we ride

A dead manatee has washed on Beachside

Only moments until I’m not alive

His sharp knife is pressed

Deep into my hide

How did I get here, what rules did I not Abide

I want life to continue, I cannot lie

What did I do wrong what was my crime

All I did was to enjoy my life

Why was his madness generated when I smiled

Now it’s time for my life to subside

With my blood draining I’m barely alive

Reviews

[Kat Plunkett]

Nice.

[TAO]

Reminds me of a dream I had...except, I was shot in my gut...again. Nice work here. It's kind of dark, a little intimidating. But it's nice...if dark can be said to be nice (and it can).

[Short.Nerd]

Awesome!!

[Mauricio Montoya]

whoa!

[Black Cat Fever]

Very creepy and frightening.

[Miss Coral]

Very nice wording- I love the creepiness of the piece. However, the rhyme scheme didn't work so much for me. There was one time where it lapsed, and there wasn't really a definite rhythm- it was just too shaky for me. Other than that, nice piece.

-Coral-

[Tina Kline]

This is very dark and grim, very realistic thoughts a person might have if they were so unlucky to end up in this situation. This is something that could happen which makes it very frightening!

[Alicia Schroeder]

Creepy, it reminded me of a stalker that I had once.. Great write

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This was frightening. Its unreal what can push a man
over the edge.

[Michael of Gilead]

You never know what a smile might cause ;)