Resplendent Child

Childhood lost, steered down the wrong path.

Alone in thought
enduring karma's retribution
apethetic transgressions
reincarnated into shame

Battled through rough seas
with a broken compass
but wayward navigation
sank a vulnerable ship

OH! Resplendent child
heart of treasures
stolen too soon
where did you go?

"I'm here...."

Tucked away somewhere
in an isolated bed
waiting to be awoken
this little boy from his slumber.

Reviews

[Madalyn Beck]

Christian. I am amazed. The title really intrigued me, but the poem itself was brilliant. Life is a constant battle and we are given choices constantly. Right or wrong, they are now the paths we walk. I adore this piece. Keep up the amazing work! (:

"OH! Resplendent child
heart of treasures
stolen too soon
where did you go?"

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Madalyn for the amazing review! It's always an honor, ma'am. :)

[Natalie Dieudonne]

This was really deep and touching.

Battled through rough seas
with a broken compass
but wayward navigation
sank a vulnerable ship

Amazing choice of words with a beautiful flow.
Awesome work Christian

[Chris Micha]

Hey my friend! Thank you so much and it's always an honor to hear from you!! Hope you're doing well. :)

[Natalie Dieudonne]

You're welcome my friend.
I'm okay :)

[Margo Seuss]

There is such a ring to Resplendent Child. The title is quite encapsulating! The language you use is always so rich in imagery and description. I can see the scene in my head perfectly. What I envision is a Dad who took his child on trip to sea. Unbenounced to him, a storm struck and lashed out at his son. Now his son is comatose. This poem, for me is like a lament for the father.

I really have no idea how to improve this poem! When I read the poem and inserted some personal pronouns places, it kind of added to it. For example: 'Alone in his thoughts' 'He battled through rough seas' 'with his broken compass.' This is a mere suggestion and a highly subjective one at that!! The use of 'he' just sort of makes the story complete in my head. However, everyone sees a different story when reading the works of different peoples....but that's my two cents on this one!

Your work is outstanding!

Margo Seuss
Courtesy of the Constructive Critisism Group

[Chris Micha]

You always have such kind & wise words. You're right by saying it's subjective, I didn't see it. In my head it was a guy who lost who he was long ago and wants that back. His inner self being desired. Margo, your words mean a lot and I thank you my friend! :)

[Margo Seuss]

Man! You people are so deep!! Unfortunatley, my brain has a tendency to look at things literaly! I think my weakness in writing is my inability to to make the reader think more. I sort of end up just spelling everything out! I beleive I could learn from your works. A pleasure to comment as always!

[melissa]

This is amazing poem keep up the great work i can't wait to read more keep them coming

[Chris Micha]

Thank you so much, Melissa :)