From Afar

Really Awful

From afar

I watched you fall

From afar

I watched it all

 

Every second of your life

I watched you grow

And take that knife

I watched you age

And then at last

You gave it up

Your foolish past

 

But then something changed

And it wasn’t enough

I watched you crave

I watched you lust

For the feel

Of stainless steel

As it tore your skin

And flesh

 

I watched you bleed

I watched you cry

I watched you ache

But never die

My advice

You would not heed

Though good advice

It was indeed

But then perhaps

If not given from afar

You would have

Not so many scars

 

And then one day

I watched you drown

In a wave of remorse

Which brought you down

A crippling blow

Aimed far two low

Like having your ankles

Kicked from beneath you

 

You sat shaking

Staring at wounds

Of your own making

Ones that you could not erase

 

I did this

Were your whispered words

I did this

Me, I did this

 

You dropped the blade

You dropped the knife

You dropped it all

To save your life

 

‘Cause you were drowning

It is was clear

Even from all the way

Over here

 

 

I no longer watch

From afar

I watch from right

Where you are

‘Cause I learnt a lesson

Didn’t I

I learnt that it’s real easy

For you to die

 

And I don’t want that

I never did.

 

I swear.

 

Reviews

[Chirpy!]

Wow. this would make I great song, it would make a great anything really.
I mean something by that just not sure what...

[Beatrice Mars]

wow. Shiver making.

[Captain Ugly]

Well written. The conflicted point of view was shown throughout. I felt it.
Just Me.
Captain Ugly.

[Monday Parker]

Very well written...Strong words that flow easily down the page...Good job on this one!!!