Red Onions Are More Violent

Red onions make me cry

Harder.

 

As I peel back purple skin,

Layers

Of translucent perfection,

Tears

Blur my vision

Till I can’t tell

Knife from hand

Chopping board from kitchen bench

 

Red onions are more

Violent.

 

A defence mechanism

That brings me to tears

My cheeks flooded

With liquid pain.

 

 

Red onions make me cry harder.

But you make me cry the worst.

 

Maybe I should stop

Trying to pull you apart.

Reviews

[EMP]

ah carol ann duffy's had some effect on you :P wow i really like this:

Red onions make me cry harder.
But you make me cry the worst.

Maybe I should stop
Trying to pull you apart.

FAVE PART :D love it :) xx

[Beatrice Mars]

onions are love, red onions are? (Love but more violent?)

awsome.

[L.G. Knight]

Wow Amazingly done. I didn't see the end comeing. Great Write

[Last Lying Look]

The ending really was perfect!
"Red onions make me cry harder.
But you make me cry the worst.
Maybe I should stop
Trying to pull you apart."
That's amazing.
Excellent write!
-Elissa :)

[Aimee Mahathy]

Wow!
What a great metaphor! =O
At first I was like "Meh, this is a bit too complex for just red onions" thinking that that's all you were writing about. The ending bit was perfect though! It was like "bam! metaphor!" And that was awesome~