Couldn't Let Him Win

I stood outside

And he within

I longed to feel

Rain on my skin

But his cruel words

Made such a din

That with a knife

I went back in

 

You see

I couldn’t let him win.

Reviews

[Beatrice Mars]

amazing, obviously. maybe it's me, but i didn't notice the rhming until i read beth's review, which, unless it is just me, i think is a really good thing because it just adds to the poem, the almost playful last two lines that are really hard hitting! (Or maybe I'm just rambling)

[EMP]

why don't you rhyme more often hmmm? because when you do, you're FABULOUS. I LIKE THIS SOOO MUCH :D