Give In To Me

Sometimes a person can enter your life at the wrong time, and no matter how hard you fight, you can't resist the tempation...

I want you inside me,

Like a baby in its womb

Let me mother you.

Feed off my body,

Gain your strength from me.

Nurturing you completely;

 

Let me pamper you,

Caress your taunt skin.

Helping you to rise within;

There is nothing I wouldn’t do…

 

Can I place my lips on yours?

Open the door,

And enter your heart?

The kiss is where it all starts,

Tangled together is where it will end.

 

Like a heart beat,

Your rhythm moves me.

Hips grinding continuously;

Divine sounds escape me,

As my eyes open to see,

You are staring back at me, lovingly…

 

Inside me you belong,

Like lyrics to a song.

Don’t care whether its right or wrong

I’m desperate for you.

 

Pretend to be mine,

Just this one time;

Leave everyone else behind,

We live in each others mind…

Give in to me.

 

Reviews

[Charles D. Moorer]

Very nicely done. Very nicely written. Check the line "Don't care whether it right or wrong" change it to its

[Laoidhigh Uilleag]

Amazing imagery in this peice!
Though it didn't rhyme, the flow was somehow hypnotic.
And the third stanza is very nice and such a true statement, wheter in a good or bad meaning.
Thanks for your submission!

[BEEGE]

This was wow.
Thats all a brotha can say right now.
The image you created was one I probably
shouldn't have had at work...lol. Well written,
well said, well done, with extra kudos!

BeegE

[Orlando Murcia]

Very sensual ,
I can feel the hungry desire
of love filled lust in this piece
of art you have written

Great job

Orlando M

[Bliss]

Wow....That was intense..........

[Chaos]

This is a wonderful poem. I love the passion and the rocking flow of this piece. Well done!

[Voltaire Mephisto (aka ..]

I had to add this to my favorite list. It was beautiful and intense. It was like it was from the point of view of a horny nurturing person who is on the level just below obsessiveness and stalking. I'm usually into rhyming poetry, but this made me forget all about that as I was reading.

[APoetsMuse]

Very descriptive. painted such a visual picture. great read!

[☮]

I felt this. You can mentally be attached to someone and it can more powerful than the physical. The ending was tight too.

[Tamme]

I could definitely feel the aching desire through your words. I particularly liked the rhythm of the fourth stanza.