Midnight in the Hollow

No smoke if nothing’s burning,

no silence without the sound.

You’re lying here beside me

while the city starts to drown.

Drinks spill like dark confessions,

your fingers tracing mine.

You tell me that I’m distant

even when our limbs entwine.

Don't hang your hopes on a ghost,

I can barely carry my own.

I just want to feel a spark

before I’m left alone.

God, you look so lovely

when you say you love me too.

I wish that I could say the words

without the doubt breaking through.

We were never built for forever,

but the lie feels warm tonight.

So stay until the morning comes

to bleed away the light.

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

Need and doubt, hope and fear all come together in this one. Let us all stay until the morning comes.

[Claude]

thanks for your amazing words.

[Soren]

It is sensuous and seductive a timorous reassurance of love from a one night stand. A lovely flow of words woven into a flow of poetic thought. Nicely done

[Claude]

thanks for your kind support.

[Soren]

You are most welcome

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Yes. This is sultry sexy and loaded with unexplored destinations. I like it. I like it a lot. I have this vision stuck in my brain that is the video version of "Love in the hot afternoon" by Gene Watson. I've loved that song since before I was old enough to understand it. But visiting New Orleans and the French Quarter I could imagine what must be going on behind the open windows with drawn curtains, particularly during Mardi Gras. I was there in the summer though. I remember a radio station that played Lucinda Williams songs and I kept saying, who is this woman and why have I never heard of her? I bought her album, "Car Wheels on a gravel Road" later in August of '98. The French Quarter was wild and wonderful before Hurricane Katrina. Katrina destroyed the French Quarter.

[Claude]

i am happy that it made you felt this much. thanks for your honest review. i Appreciate it very much.

[Buddhistboy73]

This is a real heartfelt poem about an encounter between two souls....

For me it almost reads like the opening scene to a film...all dark lights and sensual actions....soft music enhancing the scene..

It's also quite a vulnerable piece in some ways...

Thanks for sharing

BB

[Claude]

thanks for your kind support

[Claude]

"This piece explores the 'neon-noir' of modern intimacy and the heavy space between two people when one is emotionally unreachable. It’s about the tension between physical closeness and the 'internal static' that keeps us from saying what we should. Sometimes, the warmth of a temporary lie is easier to face than the cold truth of the morning."