Cold

a man wants to live forever and love forever....

 

 

A plethora of heartbreaks

have deleted this 

 

Author's Note

ps ignore my grammer, punctuation shortcommings...

Reviews

[Imperfection]

Truly impressive.
I find it really hard to come up with short lines that hold a lot of meaning in them. but this piece is exactly one such sample.

Its not long I've gone
Don't say I don't belong
I'm still here like always

I no longer believe in the notion of Forever but this stanza almost makes it real.

My favorite however is the last stanza -
I could not say
When I had my breath
Now I want to live.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Hysteria I feel today

In the endless slumber I get astray

Humor my dead heart says

I simply loved these lines a lot, though I liked the entire piece of writing but these lines outstands for me!
May be because this is exactly what I feel right now!
I also appreciate the brilliant flow of it, Overall it is a great piece of writing!

[poetic soul]

"Don't steal my grace
Flirt with my soul
Heavens I still want more"

loved these lines.. the poem on a whole is very very moving and of course eloquent... its a gr8 read.. :)

Regards,
Krishna