bee hive

a tripid poem buy a starting writer

I see I see the queen bee flying up at me,

her ugly face has a frown as she lingers up and down.

as her hurt and her pain makes her feel nearly insane,

she drops to the mound with a great big thud

as she dies on the ground.  

Reviews

[Bruce Chandler]

nice

[The Pain Stays Fresh]

Nice. I love it.

[Zombie Waffle]

Some technicalities to work on, but the poem's solid. ^_^
Great for a beginer. =)