Shadow

This is one of my personal favourites so far.

Shadow

It’s safe in here,
Short, sharp, gusts of breath,
I can feel the cold nipping on my ear,
I can feel the icy touch of death.

I play with the outside light,
Letting it slowly sneak up on me,
Letting it make me large and bright,
Illuminated for the whole world to see.

And then I hide again,
Creeping back into the dark,
Safe, once again, from them,
Safe from life’s little play park.

Always happy in this place,
I can watch through my eyes,
Look at the world’s face,
Watch them find honesty in lies.

But now I’m not alone,
I can hear the quiet ‘Hello’,
There’s an intruder somewhere here,
Deep within your shadow.
 



 


    




 

Reviews

[Dillon Cotter]

Nice description and details Jake, Very good bro.

Will

[SilentScreaming]

Wow, I love it. It's very detailed, you are very talented.

[Andrea Vargas]

I really enjoyed your poem, your very talented (:

[misha]

This is really vivid, great job.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

trouble in the midst.......well penned!

[Matthew Smith]

This was very nice and the rhyming scheme was well executed. Good job, good write.

[DearSweetAgony]

This poem made me feel the rush of a chase,and once I thought I was out of the way of anymore surprises....BAM!You ended it with a heartstopping twist.I enjoyed reading this poem.It was beautifully executed.

[DreyaArt]

Interesting.
It kind of made me think of a little beetle hiding in a crevice.
You started to write a picture in my mind, but then you didnt complete it.
Perhaps that was intentional?
Nice writing. Keep it up.