We can never be lovers

We went too deep

Traveled past the point of comfort

We dug too far into each other's skin

Reached where the blood comes from

It's there

Between us

the things we never did

coated in an angry silence

We will never be lovers

But somehow
We've become like two threads interwoven
I close my eyes and can feel you wrapped around me
A choking kind of closeness
That will not let me breathe

Reviews

[Roque]

Sometimes we need someone, but not the way they need us. And there is a lot of things unsaid that can hurt, one more than the other. Enjoyed this.

[thespaceinmybed]

that is true. thank you

[Antonio Valentino]

that was amazing!

this one so hit the mark

very well done I really enjoy your talent

[thespaceinmybed]

thank you for the compliment!

[Antonio Valentino]

you're very welcome :)

[MoriartyMesa]

We've become like two threads interwoven


Loved that, very clever.

[thespaceinmybed]

thanks glad you liked it

[WizardsAffliction]

Awesome. Fantastic word choice, though I would have liked more sensory details and for the poem overall to be expanded upon. Disregarding the previous, well done! :)

[thespaceinmybed]

actually this poem was originally longer but I cut about half of it out cause I thought it didn't make sense, thanks for the feedback!

[WizardsAffliction]

Sometimes being nonsensical makes for a beautiful poem.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I had one of these suffocating, possessive male friends before; and inevitably, he made it impossible for me to even remain friends with him. We were never anything more, except in his mind; and no matter how many times I made it clear, he was intent on thinking differently. It's the most awful position to be put in, forcing you to always struggle between wanting to be friends and then always feeling guilty because you can't give more. Eventually the guilt of not feeling what they want you to feel overwhelms to the point of pushing you away.

Whether your poem is reflective of the same, I'm not sure; but that's what I read between the lines.

Well done!

[thespaceinmybed]

It was a different situation for me, but it's great that you can relate to the feelings. Thank you.

[joshua deathdealer]

I like it..a lot. Great wordage and shivering imagery. "We dug too far into each other's skin
Reached where the blood comes from"...excellent write.

[K. Louis]

the concept of lovers like two threads interwoven is genius. loved this.

[thespaceinmybed]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!