Castles Fall (Learning as We Grow)

A sort of tongue in cheek response to men who think all women want a fairytale romance.

They say we all want a fairytale

Yet who are they to know?

I think we all want different things now-

We're learning as we grow.

Perhaps little girls dream of princes,

Build castles in the sand

But sooner or later the dreams die;

We come to understand

Fantasies don't last and castles fall.

 

As teens white weddings tempt

And we search only handsome faces

To lose at each attempt.

Then one day we find that what we sought

Weren't fairy tales at all

The thing we long for then becomes

The man who will just call!

 

Author's Note

Realistically, this is how we women are. It may be tongue in cheek, but it's funny how our dreams change as we get older, and mature. Ok, so we do not simply want the man who will call, but it wouldn't be funny if I'd described the whole of what women want. Everyone does that.

Reviews

[Annalisa]

This was amusing and entertaining as well as true, fairy-tales are over ratted and I cannot think of one person I know who actually wants one. Though I do think that having the last word completely capitalized is a bit over the top... In some ways I think it undermines the poem, your a strong enough writer that the emotion was there without the capitals. But that is a stylistic difference so ignore if me if you wish.

Great work though, this was lovely.

[Justin Tobey]

:) Deep and meaningful, but with an ending that made me smile. It's a bit different for us guys, but I can understand what you mean when you say that dreams change just as we do. Life grows more complicated, and we lose our dreams of faeries and magic amidst the chaos of reality.

Great write. :D

[Justin Tobey]

:) Deep and meaningful, but with an ending that made me smile. It's a bit different for us guys, but I can understand what you mean when you say that dreams change just as we do. Life grows more complicated, and we lose our dreams of faeries and magic amidst the chaos of reality.

Great write. :D

[Kat Williams]

The man to call...the phone to ring from anyone..the guy to just show up. Sometime life just plays out like that. Nice write

[MichelleSun]

OMG!!!! That is sooo soooo on point! Love it !!!!

[Michael]

Your pushing the format a bit by breaking the aBcB across stanzas and switch it to an AbAc. Nothing really wrong with that but it will throw some off a bit. Are you going for a 4/3 meter?

[Mistral Bilgera]

this piece speaks true!

The thing we long for then becomes
The man who will just call!


hahaha! so men, call if you say you will.... =)

great writing... its as if i've written something from someone who reads Cosmopolitan Magazines. nice work!

[Legion]

Some would call that selling out. Others, it's just life. Either way, you have hit upon the reality of it all. Good write. Keen observation.