PantsOffDanceOFF (Limerick)

There are some men who think that romance

Simply requires an absence of pants

Some women know just what to do

When they encounter one of you

With your wallets in hands, off they dance

 

 

Reviews

[Teenage poet]

It was so close to perfect. Like the reveiwer before me said your rhythm was a little off. but you can perfect that later.

[Susan S.]

Very nice effort! You have your rhyme down and your twist at the end was delightful. You still need some work on the rhythm, but you're nearly there.

Good job.
Susan S.

[Michael]

I like it, it really fits the limerick format well. One thing to look at, try to add a word to the second line. The hook in the turn works very well when the the BB pair are a full foot shorter.


But it is really good regardless.

[papaed]

Hormones, added to chauvinistic, abusive attitudes, especially when a boy's brain is not fully mature can certainly place them into compromising, regretful positions. The vision of a pants off dance off is great. A wonderful arrangement of the words to give an impact to your message.

Thank you for this.
papaed

[Rambling Prose]

Very creative and a good idea too! Severs them right, eh?

~giggles~

[Mistral Bilgera]

the first limerick in this site that i love! really funny and smart. =)