Lady Liberty's Obituary.... A Rondeau

A poem in Rondeau form. This is just what flowed when I set down to write. I had no vision before embarking.

Sometimes she dies, sweet liberty...

Money, not truth shall set you free.

Freedom's frail as a flightless bird,

Where cries for help are seldom heard

By those with more power than we.

 

'Neath poverty's glare, her blood spilt,

Innocence cries, clutches the hilt--

On the Bureaucrats' blade dies she,

Sweet liberty...

 

A nation built by sturdy hands

Cannot be maintained with grandstands,

Arrogance on the senate floor!

The health of freedom requires more.

You've buried her 'neath foreign sands

Sweet liberty...

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Angela]

Excellent Rondeau..."Freedom's frail as a flightless bird"..I agree, yes it is. In fact it is even more so. Our freedom and well being has been placed in the hands of those we chose to govern us and we are at their mercy, for better or worse.
I love the flow and the wonderful use of metaphors. For not having any vision before hand, you did an amazing job on this poem. Impressive!!

[M. Amphet Salt]

You have summed up in these few short lines the feelings that most American's feel, but are afraid to declare. We have let our own great nation bury itself and there no will left on the part of the American people to stand up for what we desire. We have left our country in the hands of the ones who know what is so best for us until we are mindless and arrogant. I have came to blame capitolism and all its glory is the failed system and it looks out only for those who stand to make a buck. I would wish that somewhere in the future we finish socializing our government; after all schools and police forces are socialized why can't health care for example be?

I really love your poem. It is well written and has very elegant flow. "Freedoms frail as a flightless Bird" is both a superb simile and metaphor. I also like the symbolism associated here with bird in this piece considering the bald eagle is almost extinct as well. But the third stanza really says it all....our freedoms health requires more. Very strong words and a wonderful poem.

[Laura E. Aranda]

This is so 'political' necessary! I love it and agree with every word. I like the idea of a Rondeau and plan to try them out myself....good luck in the contest! Cheers,lea