A Captialist Frame of Mind

Do not let your Self go

Some say I conspire
the others I inspire
but one way
or another
I'm just doing it
for my Self.

My Self has many needs,
but I reap my own seeds.
Now, I pay my taxes,
need not raise any axes.
My Self has many needs,
it will use any means.

It is not I, you see
my Self has many needs,
and if you just take heed.
Listen to me, I plead.
Do not let your Self
take lead.

Reviews

[Scott Metro]

Too many real angles to ignore.
The hive mentality would seem most dangerous.
An interesting glimpse.
Have to squeeze freedom into the soup.
Scott

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I think I get the gist of what you intended here but as a poem it needs some work. The rhyming feels 'forced' and not natural and some lines are clumsy with over use of Self throughout. One trap many fall into is to write to write rather than writing to express. That is what this one felt like to me and you are far better than that.

[Matt Sayer]

A punchy summation of the descent into capitalistic self-servitude. I loved the line "Now, I pay my taxes, need not raise any axes." An excellent representation of the dichotomy between the woodcutter and the neck-chopper. Well done :)

[anna]

Simple but overstated. I like it. Good write Cosmin. :)

[CosminDZS]

Much thanks, I'm flattered