.....musings

when you stare into my eyes

i feel my skin begin to flush

and in the deep valleys of brown

i see an expanse terrain

which will never

cease to amaze me

when we speak

i forget what i mean to say

cause nothing ever seems as important as i love you

we both know

how short a life can be

and its as if

we aim to miss no moment

i want to explore every emotion life has tooffer

with you at my side

decide whats goodand right

and what to leave behind

children no more weve met transformed
and ready to become

what fate has always meant for us.

Reviews

[Leigh]

You've got some great lines in here, this poem speaks of your yearnings within a changing time

[brianna vega]

thank you love :]

[Kaylor Mason]

This is a good statement of love. Just my opnion, but I think this piece would sound better if it was spoken to the one you loved, rather than read to him. I think vocal words would be more powerful here. Congratulations on being in love--it's a lot better than the alternative :)

[brianna vega]

thank you. i usually write these while hes sleeping so he has something to read in the morning :]

[tekphobik]

I got bored halfway through and stopped reading. On a positive note, you're in love. On a negative note, you've said nothing of consequence in what you've written. Lots of potential though.

[brianna vega]

thats nice i read a book halfway once and i know nothing of the meaning