cant get you out of my mind

i watched you leaning against the wall

beating music into existence

next to an open window

clear eyes

awake

my heart held its breath

i could not look away or even exist outside your eyes

outside your form

your shadows

the muscles in your face

the curves and mountains of your fist

i wasnt sure if i was even awake

your beauty was so real it pained

and i fell again and again

 

Reviews

[Stephen]

Ha! The man you love is lucky one and yeah ..his hotness makes you landed on him but you want to stay away cus, you've got a fear of loosing your breathes when the eyes go eye to eye to the wall next to the window.

Keep Writing!

[Rob Santana]

A unique writing. Personal emotions maybe?

[Moflo]

This is an interesting piece, I like how you describe the fist, almost to suggest this is more to than just a love poem...Perhaps to me, its a love poem about an abusive relationship. But anyway you put it, nicely penned.

[eli mercuree rue]

Hurts so bad, yet it feels so good. Love is crae


I like the rhythm in this one and the ease with which i could resonate with narrator.
Dope

[brianna vega]

Thank you. I m glad you like it. Easy reading is one of my goals.