BILLY

contest poem,not entered

Bashful Billy dreamed her
Perfume
Sniffing honeysuckle
Fire ant freckles interjected her
Splendid presence
Billy washed and washed scrubbing her
into Oblivion  her
purer then the glass
 sky
complexion transparent
so serene
Two, perfume and Billy
danced his merciful dream.

Author's Note

Not entered,Had way too many pimples

Reviews

[Emily B]

you should have entered it, I would have voted for you

[SHEEMA HUQ]

really ineresting, sounds almost like a divine 'object relational' ceremony....

[Syed Ali]

Really nice . I wish there was more of this poem but it is still one of the coolest write ever :)

[lee von cleef]

The rules only let me use 40 words, but on Tolvin I cheated ,I used 40 words three times.

[Sami Khalil]

Nice write . But are you selling any perfumes. LOL... Ha ha ha
Just kidding

[M.E.Lyle]

Billy just couldn't get her out of his mind.
Pretty neat style, not too revealing, and yet not too secretive either.