Clouds Haiku

     in separation

 

i drink your tears when you weep

 

such is our journey

Author's Note

Syllable count: 17
Syllable structure: 5-7-5

The clouds have their journey, we have ours. We must wonder do clouds drink our tears too? (when they evaporate -- or am I being too poetic here?)
Can be read L --> R and vice-versa.

P.S.: 'e-ar' is used as a diphthong, hence tears will be a 1 syllable word instead of 2.

Reviews

[Moonie]

I really like the explanation you gave...yes, you are being too poetic , but in a good way! I, too, have always wanted to write a poem that can be read from both left and right side...this one was quite interesting...

[Stonz P.]

I've written more Haiku/Senryu that are readable either way. You can check them out too.

read moreI've written more Haiku/Senryu that are readable either way. You can check them out too.

Thank you for reading and your kind review... :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like this ----less is more...but a powerful punch in these three lines.

[Stonz P.]

Thank you, Jacob. Always a pleasure to hear from you.