Lazy Days

A Poem by Cully45

Just a few lines of thought

Oh for the days the Sun did shine

To feel a warmth upon my face

It brings a smile to everyone

In Winter time our worlds a desolate place

The Clouds rush by and rain doth bring

Or even a Snowy glistening glow

A slippery surface under foot

With a severe coldness well in tow

But as Spring approaches so does the Sun

It’s a bit brighter and warmer now

A much more pleasanter place to be

It brings a much better feeling somehow

Our seasons bring special Joy

Whether it be Winter Spring Summer or Fall

Each brings it own unique story to tell

A wonderment to us all

The mind’s eye sees more wondrous joy

Each time of year will bring

In springtime it brings out the best

It’s a joy to hear Birds Sing

In Summer its a nice warm glow

Makes us all as happy can be

In Autumn the trees all shed their leaves

Sadly dying off until another time

And in Winter its cold and miserable

Though sometimes the Snow can look sublime

This world of ours is a wondrous place

God gave us to enjoy

I have loved it all my life

Be it as a man or little boy

© 2026 Cully45

Author's Note

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JayG

• First, stanzas. Without them, it’s a monolithic block of text, with no hesitations for breath, changes in direction, or, to help the reader keep their place. The ABCB rhyming structure you’re using, would seem a natural break-point.

• You’re too often bending the line to the needs of the rhyme. Saying “With a severe coldness well in tow,” is VERY close to “Yoda speak.” Ideally, the rhyming word is such a perfect match for the thought that the rhyme seems almost accidental.

• “A much more pleasanter place to be?” Seriously?

If you’ve not seen it, I STRONGLY suggest you read the excerpt from Stephen Fry’s, The Ode Less Traveled on a bookseller site. The rest of the book is mostly an in-depth look at the various poetry structures, but the excerpt is a brilliant analysis of the flow of language. It made a huge difference in how I approach the writing of poetry, and I’m betting that you’ll find yourself saying, “I never noticed that. How in the hell did I never notice that?”