You Change me

I used to be grumpy
you've changed me
I used to be annoying
you've changed me.

For so many years,
you've changed me so many
cause of your care
most of all,
the love you gave for me.

I try to do everything ,
for you to love me,
you changed me alot,
all by your love on me,
you love is magical,
I love you,
how you changed me,
how you love me.

Author's Note

It's a bit of an annoying peice of writing, but I feel like writing something like this now, hope you will telll me what do you think.

Reviews

[HopelesslyDevoted]

i like it. its very true- we are often to changed for the better because someone shows us and helps us to experience love that we didn't know we wanted or needed.

[.]

this is a great poem-
i love the mood/emotive shifts.
just wonderfully written :)

:)

[MiidniightSoul]

It's a lovely and beautiful poem. If you correct some of your grammatical mistakes, like the 'much' in the second stanza 'For so many years', it would be an even greater poem. But everyone makes mistakes, so it's okay. Great write.

[Linear]

for so many years/youv'e changed me so much/because of your care/all by your love for me/

hope that helps, a beautiful and heartfelt poem

[Lilly]

I agree with Richard. I think the flow of this piece could be helped a little with a few tiny changes like using the word 'much' instead of 'many' in the second stanza... maybe you need to play around with the last stanza to get it to flow better also...

I like what this poem is saying though. The feeling that you can get from someone because they love you...feeling as if they bring out the best in you...Nice work.

[Richard McLin]

It's a good piece, but lacks rhythm.

-Richard

[Marie Harrison]

This is sweet. I like the various changes in emotions that you chose to show.