I've Tried

I've tried to tell you I love you,
but you never listen.
I've tried to telll you,
how much I love you,
but you ignore me,
leaving me alone in dark,
lefting me in the corner,
tears rolling on my eyes.

I've tried to tell you,
the girl in front of you,
is a liar,
she is not the one,
you should love,
it's me,
who honestly love you,
but who listen to me?

Now, you are dating that girl,
you've given everything you have to her,
just like she is your everything,
you've lost yourself,
in her lovely mask.

I tried to tell you,
but you just wont listen.

Author's Note

what do you think?

Reviews

[HereWithoutYou<3]

Many guys and girls go through this, they think that the person they're with is such a saint. Guys find the girl that is beautiful on the outside but don't even bother to inspect the inside. Girls usually don't see it until the guy shows it, then they start being afraid or just completely blind to the fact they're being played. Then they act so surprised when she should have been smart and read that guy from the very beginning. But I think it's more of a shocker when a guy finds himself in that position, because he doesn't know what to do. He doesn't want to turn out to be the idiot that gave up a " hot " chick.

[Dalebear]

This is a great write

[Norma M Sutton]

This expresses genuine emotion, but there are some typos in it. Try reading it aloud to find them. I have to do that with mine. Seems like I'm bad to add a extra letter or to invert them or combine two words into one. I see that you are doing that too. Once you have it polished it will be great.

[Loner]

Awesome write!

[Kimberly]

Very good.

[sarah]

I love you is harder to say then we can really understand

[Linear]

This reminds me so much of another girl from Hong Kong I once knew, emotive, heart wrenching write, well expressed

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Emotional turmoil in this poem!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

i can relate to this a lot. reminds me of the guy that i have been trying to get over for a couple years now....

[serpent]

very emotional... guess its more like a story... letting go of our loved ones is awefully difficult and no doubt we try out best and more to keep them away from what we think will harm them...I dont want to sound rude or agressive here but i think we should let them be... we shall trust their choices as well..afterall we are also a part of their choices...aint it? So why doubt it...
and m sure... we are there to hold them when they make those wrong choices and fall into that pit of sadness and regret