I wont Be Hurt

I have dreamt for you,
I have once loved you,
I used to be in love,
I used to love,
every part of you.

Now I have lost you,
now I am confuse,
why did you go away,
why did you left me.

why do  you need to do this?
Why don't you left me at the first place?
why have you done such thing to me?

If you leave me at the first place,
I wont be hurt,
I wont be hurt anymore.

Author's Note

what do u think?

Reviews

[GamingGal]

Pros: It was a good little poem with good rhetorical questions scattered throughout. I like the flow and story and progression of the poem; it was nice and didn't stagnate in one spot with un-needed description. You got straight to the point.

Cons: My only suggestion would be to find a different word to replace "ditch" Sure, it fits, but it doesn't seem.....poetic enough for this poem, doesn't fit enough with the other words. But that's just my opinion.

Overall: I liked it :)

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Why are you confused..?? Seems this confused state of mind is reflected here in the poem..!!!
I am unable to understand..

[Sunflower 20]

this just goes to show that not all love stories don't end with a happy ending. i really like how you started with the love that was once there, then disappeared.

But I especially like the ending, with a strong hope for the future, nicely done :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem of love goodness and then pain. It is a two edge sword love. Without we are nothing. But with love near. Pain are a few words away. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote