All you take

 I regret to inform

you

The opaque of my eyes

soildified

And i no longer dream

doe eyed

Bolted to the thin line

seperating

My refusal of submission

latching

On thirstly, a pup

failing

To exsist

 

Author's Note

all comments welcome!

Reviews

[KAREN]

I like it alot! Short poems are fine to me, ones that mean something! I like the flow too!

[Moflo]

You have a very interesting format here and I think it adds to the purpose of the poem. Its a good write, could maybe use some length but its solid and pretty profound as is. Good job.