Change

I started thinking about my relationship. Wondering, in a way, what would happen if I wanted it to change.

 

If I could change anything, would it be my love for you?

I wouldn’t be as fond of you, and it wouldn’t be so true.

I would run away; far, far away where I wouldn’t have my fears.

I wouldn’t have to miss you; I wouldn’t shed my tears.

This pain in my heart, it wouldn’t be right here.

My feelings wouldn’t be as strong, and my vision would be clear.

The longing and waiting would become the past,

We’d no longer be connected, as we are; & you’d see our contrast.

I’d forget your name and love and lust,

I’d forget those phone calls, and all of our trust.

You’d forget me, as our memories would fade away.

But then, I’d feel empty, and wish you would have stayed.

I’d miss your love, your laugh, your everything and more.

I’d beg and plead and grovel, hoping at your door.

But would you forgive me, and want me just the same?

I wouldn’t want to test it, no I wouldn’t play this game.

So if I could change anything, no it would not be this love,

I’d rid of something else, and give it the unwanted shove.

 

Change

Author's Note

So what'd you think? Good, bad, horrible, firy pit of doom? Tell me, tell me, tell me. [please]

Reviews

[Michael X]

so very heart tugging and the emotions are so true that in its depth of the
flow, your words pour from the heart, they come across as whispers, and this
poem is classic and naturally beautiful. the images are sweet and caring.
your talent has really come to life in this poem.

[The Cute 1]

GOOD

[bluessadmood]

Again a lovely write ,so much feelings and heart in it..
I would feel empty and wish you ve stayed,I miss your love,laugh and everything
I would beg,plead and grovel,hoping at your door,would you forgive me,want me just the same
I wont play this game,if I to change anything,then no it would not be this love
How I enjoyed this..lovely write..

[Farrah Grahm]

I agree, it has potential. It could use some tightening up. But its a great idea, that love should be lessened to lessen the pain.
Good start.

[DanaRegen]

I liked it was a fantastic poem. Nicely written. What to change? true love is truly not to change. Very nice poem!

[Platypus]

It has potential. The topic is a good one and you are expressing your thoughts well. My suggestion, take it as you will, is to shorten it, make it more concise. You seem to be saying the same thing over and over. You have skills that are worth developing and anybody who wants to write, should do so, even if just for the love of it. The vast majority of us (amateur writers) will never be published anyway so we have to love it or there would be no other reason to do it. :) Keep working on it. You'll hit it just right one of these days and then you'll read it out loud to yourself and say, "Aha!" Good luck!

[Jinx's Heart]

Intriguing. This seems (and perhaps it's me who sees more than I'm meant to but) rather deep. I'm very curious to whom the narrator is speaking. I like it very much, but there seems to be a hidden audience in there. Well written.

[Stella]

Love it!