Laugh

I laugh,

I cry,

I live a normal life,

then I die.

Everyone does this,

it's normal,

Really normal,

Unbelievably normal,

Strange huh?

I live not caring,

not wondering, 

not thinking, 

about the poor families that dare live a tough life,

of death and no trust.

How sad!

Author's Note

please comment. I am trying

Reviews

[Brittany]

I agree with Jay. What if you broke it out into two poems. It's not the words or thoughts that are the problem here, but maybe just two poems mashed together. I like the way I can feel your feelings. Have you ever thought of using imagery or similes or metaphors to describe the way you feel? Keep writing!

[The Jay]

Your first two stanzas are fine. Good start, but the third stanza really throws the poem off balance. It seems unconnected with the previous stanzas.