Chances

One Chance

Two Chance

Three Chance

Four......

 

The lies he told should close the door.

 

He lied.

She believed.

He laughed.

she cried.

 

 

One Chance

Two Chance

Three Chance

Four......

 

 The lies he told were closing the door.

 

He was conniving.

She was clueless.

He was smart.

She was dumb.

 

 

 

 One Chance

Two Chance

Three Chance

Four.....

 

The lies he told almost closed the door.

 

He lied.

She almost believed.

He laughed.

She didn't cry.

 

 

 

One Chance

Two Chance

Three Chance

Four.....

 

 

The lies he told closed the door.

 

He was conniving.

She knew it.

He was smart.

She wasn't dumb.

 

 

 

 One Chance

Two Chance

THree Chance

Four....

 

 

 

Chances?

 

No More...

Reviews

[LadySoDivine]

I could REALLY relate to this. Been in that situation once... Never again. I've always been careful after that. So with me from then on it was "One chance and then no chance". ;) Honestly, I don't believe in second chances anymore. Anyway, this is such a strong piece. I like the structure and the stanzas. The way the poem kind of counts down makes us see what's coming next but still keeps us on the edge of the seat. Really well done, bravo! :D

[Darling Dallas]

Thank You so much!!

[Lexi Richard]

I adore this! Sends shivers down my spine, I love your wording, and everything about this. Keep up the great writing!

[Darling Dallas]

Thank you!!!

[Account Closed]

The repetition in this gives such ha great feel! I love this! So powerful!

[Luke Rawlings]

This one was a 'woah' moment at the end. I guessed the ending, but it was delivered in a powerful way with your writing style. I love the countdown effect, very well done :)

[Darling Dallas]

Thank You :)

[Leica]

Many of us have done that countdown.. nicely penned..

[annabellee]

I absolutely loved it, especially the repetition. Great work :)

[Darling Dallas]

Thank you guys for the positive feed back!

[Simon Welsh]

Love it :)

[Darling Dallas]

Thanks :)

[William C Jones III]

This made me want to read "more and more!" Good write.

[Darling Dallas]

Thanks :)

[plainme]

I like it, it's a very clever write. And the message you bring is very clear. It's been brought very subtle and it evolves very well towards the end. Wonderful flow, it reads very well! Good one!

[Darling Dallas]

Thank You so much!