No remorse

Stuck, somewhere in the middle, of the girl I see in the mirror, and the one I hoped I would become. Disappointment floods my mind as the tears threaten to betray me once more. I thought I would be strong, face the fears that haunt my dreams. It feels as if you won, like I never had a chance. I tried so hard to forget, but for some reason I can't let it go. They say you never move on until you forgive the person, but can forgiveness really be the answer here? It can't be. The hate still consumes me, and the pain is still so real. Forgiveness hardly seems in order. Your face is seared into my memory with no remorse. I fight away the memories as I fall to the floor in fear. The room spins as the images begin to blur.

Reviews

[Karrar]

I like the idea that you're trying to portray, but I feel you lack coherence somewhere along the line.
Flow is a very important thing for a good writer, and I'm sure you will get that through some exposure.

"Disappointment floods my mind as the tears threaten to betray me once more."

This was one of the best parts of your work. Happy writing!

[Eagle Cruagh]

Time is such a beautiful thing.
In time all bad things fade
All that is foggy becomes clear
And the frozen world of memories
become Spring again.

A beautiful story/poem.

My rating ---- 100 %

------ Eagle Cruagh