Don't Leave

Passion in the sky, none in your eyes.

Negativity surrounds me as I beg and plea.

Don't leave, don't leave. 

Sorry little girl, you've got so much to learn.

They all leave, they all go off on their own.

They leave you behind to choke on your misery. 

Not a second thought of you once they disappear. 

That's the worst part.

It kills you each time. 

They don't even care or seem to realize. 

You let them each in, they let themselves out. 

You fall back into the cycle without a single doubt. 

Reviews

[Confuser]

D.T.: Such a beautiful and sad melancholy poem. To plead for someone not to leave, and have someone discourage the character even more. It is heartwrenching and emotionally charged. I simply love the poem. Everything you have written can be true, in the world we live in. The imagery is rich as well; All I could visualize was a daughter wishing for her father to stay; and in her mind, hopefully, she knew he would leave, which then, leads to that cycle of rejection, that churning feeling of low self-worth. I loved it and thank you so very much. Dale

[D.T.]

Thanks! That's really nice! (:

[Confuser]

My pleasure! Dale....

[alf]

Hi D.T. This is a killer!!! Love the poem!!! And I hear where you are coming from in every line you have written!!!!! This is great writing, so passionate and so honest!!! Just luuuuuuuuuv it!!! alf

[Chirag Kumar]

Nice work D.T. It is very painful to imagine a life without our loved one and so our heart begs me not to walk away. Loved it :)

[D.T.]

Thanks! Much appreciated!

[wordman]

a sad write,could be a friend,could be a parent
but sad whichever

[D.T.]

Not sure if that's meant to be good or bad, either way it's the truth so thanks! (:

[wordman]

you are welcome,i never give bad reviews

[Nerf]

I like this a lot. It encompasses a lot of pain within the words. I felt the scream I heard the cry, I saw the reality in each line.

[D.T.]

Thank you so much! (: