life soup

more of a thought than a poem, but here ya go.

I used to stir up my ice cream

Until it became ice cream soup

And then I’d eat it

‘Cause I liked it better that way

And the cold ice cream

Hurt my teeth.

 

And I feel like that’s kinda

What I’m doing with my life,

You know, stirring it up

Until it becomes life soup

So that it’s not so cold

Reviews

[Rahul]

Again an interesting but funny poem as well but hey, don't you think your this line
"And the cold ice cream Hurt my teeth", should be written as this "And the cold ice cream "NUMB" my teeth when i hit this to my teeth". I think that'd b good.
it's othewrise really a great write and i really loved this piece much because it's warm day's re here and i need to eat some cold ice cream even i've had ice cream yesterday but it;'s been finished now so, i''l try to get another pack of ice cream...lol
this's really a great write and you made saliva in my mouth because right now i'm just screaming a cold ice cream that i'm eating and numbing my teeth lol :)

[Tree]

Alerted by a fellow poet's post I found myself wandering inside of here. And so glad that I did, a wonderful thoughtful poem that clings to my own human nature, I suspect a lot like that thick ice cream, to the spoon.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for reading and for your kind words! i'm glad this registered with you and others as i was afraid the simplicity of this was too simple.

[Wondering Mind]

our eating habits tell a lot about what/who/how we are..I guess this is more confirmation for me that it is so..
Tell me, please, does it work?

[Dana Alsamsam]

i'm not so sure. no matter how much i stir it up it still seems to be pretty cold...

[Wondering Mind]

then it must need more thermo-dynamics than mechanics!! :)