Writer's Dissonance

i met a boy.

I feel my bones collapse

Sweetly against my skin

Beneath your anomalous touch. 

I'm a writer, 

You say, alluring, daring me, 

Inviting me in to your world. 

You wrap your hand 

Around the corner of my existence

Pull it in for a hug, and ask

Benevolently, 

Can I take a look?

You didn't have to ask.

Your name burns softly

When I write it, feels

Light when spoken aloud. 

I read your writing, and feel 

My thoughts collapse

Into the consolatory wings of your own,

Undressing me with your words, 

Caressing the dissonance in perfect syllables. 

I think of your enchanting eyes, 

Knock on the door of your being,

And say, 

Come with me. 

Reviews

[Deuces]

What you've described is the feeling we all the love the most in life, the one we try hardest to feel with another person. To read ones thoughts makes them a part of you, even if just for a moment. Adding this one to favs.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for your kind words and understanding! i find it almost strange that i wrote this the first night i met someone.

[Everett DeValle]

Beautifully written...just reading it flowed so well...the metaphors; the descriptions; and the essence of your soul...made a wonderful combination from heart to fonts. Lovely.

[Dana Alsamsam]

wow- thank you for this incredibly kind review! it was one of those poems that literally flowed from heart to pen...it even missed my mouth and hands before it made it onto paper! thank you so much for reading.

[Everett DeValle]

You are very welcome, Dana.

[s y e]

It's sexy and beautiful. A great, unique type of piece. I loved it, well done! :)

- Noodle.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you for reading and for your kind words!

[s y e]

My pleasure. x

[Astro]

The sentiment is so plain, but the carefully chosen language is a bouquet that permeates inside the reader. It becomes the writer-reader sharing itself for some and seeing itself mirrored in others. Very nice write Dana.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you for this introspective review! it means a lot:)

[Astro]

You're welcome. I really enjoyed the read.

[Graveyardfuck]

I like how alluring this is. It's sexy and beautiful. A great, unique type of piece.

[Sami Khalil]

"You didn't have to ask.

Your name burns softly

When I write it, feels

Light when spoken aloud."
A good read and write...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you for reading and for your kind words!

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Tomahawk Joe]

good I like this one as well.