The Soul Reaper

Just a song I wrote around Halloween. I was inspired by Xandria's song Cursed

The Soul Reaper

Here I stand, left for dead and powerless!

Here I stand, left for dead and powerless!

As I wander through these haunted hollows

The ghosts of those I've failed follow

And I know that tomorrow will be another day of sorrow

But I continue to fight the vampires

That have made my life a nightmare

To ease the pain burning in my mind like Greek fire

Agony has come to satisfy his bloodlust

From his witches and goblins I have nowhere to run

I have lost everything that I love

Now I'm trapped in the playground of phantoms

Here I stand, left for dead and powerless!

Here I stand, left for dead and powerless!

Daylight is laid to rest in the coldest crypt

Put there by Evil's wicked kiss

As the malevolent Maiden of Shadows rises to command

Agony has come to satisfy his bloodlust

From his witches and goblins I have nowhere to run

I have los everything that I love

Now I'm trapped in the playground of phantoms

I can hear the Soul Reaper screaming my name

Can somebody please save me from the shadow's rape?

Devastated and crestfallen, I'm deafened by the banshee's shriek

Agony has come to satisfy his bloodlust

From his witches and goblins I have nowhere to run

I have lost everything that I love

Now I'm trapped in the playground of phantoms

Here I stand, left for dead and powerless!

Here I stand, left for dead and powerless!

 

 

Author's Note

I don't know if you will like this or not....regardless of whether you do or don't, tell me what you think. I want honest criticism!

Reviews

[Valentine]

Your word usage would do better without repeating lines. Otherwise your thoughts go along with themes people your age are crazy about. People need to know how young you are. You are writing super for one still in school. Keep the writes coming. Valentine

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for reviewing this, I'm really glad you like this. The repeated lines are in there because of the song that inspired me to write this :)

[Ezekiel Silver]

While this piece wouldn't make a very good poem due to it's constant repetition it does make a great song. I can almost hear the music when I read the lyrics! Excellent work!!

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for the constructive criticism. the song that inspired me to write this had repitition as well, so i decided to incorperate repitition into this. Thanks for reviewing this!

[Ezekiel Silver]

You're welcome!