My Ebony Heart

A poem written for one of the main characters in my book "One Minute"

My Ebony Heart

Behind my eyes there's a lantern light

That cries for help from the divine

Behind this mask, my smile and laugh

Is a broken girl scarred by a painful past

Twinkle, twinkle little star, let me rest my head in your arms

Erase these claw marks bestowed upon my ebony heart

I'm tired of being so alone in this gleaming stream of stone

Dear Misery, let me go so I can find the warmth I've never known

Lingering is this fierce, freezing feeling

That society will not ever accept me

All that they see is a sick monstrosity

But that doesn't mean I'm a demon queen

Rain, oh rain, please go away, come back again some other day

Today just let the shining sun lay his fingers upon my face

For centuries I've played this game of hiding from the world, afraid

Give me somebody truthful when they say I don't have to be ashamed 

Author's Note

This poem goes with one of the main character's in my book "One Minute"( I'm not going to tell you who that character is yet because it's going to be a surprise). If you want to check out what I have written of my book so far, it's under My Writing. I hope you enjoy this poem! :)

Reviews

[iveltac]

So are you going into writing now? Just storys or books? Nice poem.

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad you like this. I'm trying to be a writer that writes songs, poetry, stories, and I hope to write a book someday :)

[iveltac]

Same here.

[Cindy Marietta]

Really enjoyed this poem, speaks of suffering and despair with hopes of a better future. Great write!

[DoormanDan]

I appreciate you taking the time to pop over here and review my writing :)

[Tina Kline]

An excellent dark poem of pain and despair, longing to find freedom, love and acceptance. Well done.
I enjoyed your poem.

[DoormanDan]

I love writing poems and songs like this, and am glad that they aren't disappointing. Thanks for reviewing :)

[Tina Kline]

You are very welcome.

[Amber Lily]

This character sounds really interesting, almost as if they have been living in a cave and crave to see the sunlight. "Today just let the shining sun lay his fingers upon my face". That's my favorite line :)

[DoormanDan]

Out of all the characters I have ever included in my stories, this one will be the most fun for me to write. This character, as well as my story, are inspired by an animator named Monty Oum(you may or may not know who he is, but he made a brilliant web series called RWBY, and works for a corporation called Roosterteeth :)

[Amber Lily]

I LOVE RWBY!!!!!!!

[DoormanDan]

Oh wow, hooray, another fan! I love it too, it just has something special to it that Ive never seen in another anime :)

[DoormanDan]

RIP Monty Oum

[Amber Lily]

The style itself is really different, but it still looks good! I like how their really trying to go a new way about it and it's really working! RIP Oum :(

[Suvada]

I really like this poem I like how some parts rhyme good work keep writing :)

[DoormanDan]

I'm glad you like it! Thanks for taking the time to review this, I really appreciate it :)

[Suvada]

no problem:)

[Tasfia Islam]

Oh, this is too good. The way you combined the nursery rhymes in your poem in such a meaningful way, really impressing... :)

[DoormanDan]

I really wanted to add a childish charm to a dark/sad poem. Im glad you like it :)

[Alfred Kukitz]

Hi Doorman,

A nice written piece. Sadness blankets the cafe this morning. I hope everything works out.

Regards,al

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for reviewing this. I appreciate the feedback :)

[Cool Girl]

This was outstanding! Amazing job, my dear friend :)

[DoormanDan]

thanks CG. I really appreciate the review and the kind words :)

[Cool Girl]

You're welcome! :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This was great, full of emotion and depth.
All your poems sound more like songs then mine haha.
Is this poem, from the book you are writing?
If so that's very cleaver.
I enjoyed reading this :)

[DoormanDan]

Thanks for the kind words. Yes, this poem is from the book I'm writing. I haven't written the chapter it's going to be in yet, but I'm planning on having it in the book somewhere :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Sounds like a good idea :)
your welcome :)

[DoormanDan]

My book is on this website if you want to check it out at all. It's under my writing :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

cool ill check it out sometime :)

[Lizardo]

It is really good!
Really goes for the story and how it's going.
Great poem you did here Dan, I do like it alot :)

[DoormanDan]

Im glad you think so Lizardo! I have chapter 4 written, and will most likely post it tomorrow if I can :)

[Lizardo]

Good! I've been wating eagerly to read more xD

[DoormanDan]

It will finally introduce one of my favorite characters to write :)

[Lizardo]

Like I said once, This book is full of surprises :)