Smoke...

Its smoke...what is there to say?

A cigaret in my hand,
The first one...and...
And then to take the lighter.
After week its a fighter,
To resist the frighter.
Desire to smoke.
Its still better than coke.
A weird code,
To excuse the hold.
The hold of the nicotine.
Every time, i light one,
I wonder, how come it won.
How did it all begin?
With the very first going down,
Straight to my lungs,
Cancer hung
The curtain
The possibilities are certain.
It will cut my life,
Like a knife.
"You gotta stop"
Many people pop
When they see the cop,
Asking for id.
Then the monsters food
Is taken...
Its hungry,
Getting grumpy.
Another one from the stash,
And nicotine's splash,
In my blood,
Its a flood.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[sereenaoutloud]

This is very well written and has an awesome flow. The nicotine addiction so many struggle to break! It also feel like it has and underlying meaning of fighting so hard, trying to break free but who hard it can be and how easy to fall back into old habits!!
Love this write IM...

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much.

[RiverRei]

I like this as a whole but I can't really relate. I've wanted to try smoking but I've never done it so I don't know what it's like. I have had addictions before though so I can relate in that aspect. Smoking is hard :( The only thing I wanna say is it's spelled 'cigarettes'...overall a really good piece that describes the struggle of all addicts :( Sorry babe. I'm here for you.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I think all addictions are hard. Thank you so much:)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Oh...and thanks for noticing the spelling error.

[Marcel Grant]

I really liked this as well. It was simple, not drowning in pity, but subtle crying to it, you know? Nice job!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

thank you.

[Destiny Dreamer]

Oh so meaningful! Amazing write!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[closed]

this was interesting
i like that you're going in a new direction with your poetry

good use of metaphor


-Dream

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[closed]

youre welcome

[Dani The Unreviewed]

This one's about smoking..........