Nicole & Jessica

My funny girls

Nicole, a cute girl, a funny girl.
Likes day-dreaming, ice-cream and chocolate eating.
Likes to say smile a lot and good day, mum.
Likes to swim and fool around.

 

Jessica, a pretty girl, a funny girl.
Likes to study hard and do her work.
Likes to think and drink.
Likes to run and jump.

Author's Note

comments are welcome

Reviews

[R.C.A.]

this poem is okay. It is hard for readers because it really doesn't mean much to them. Maybe become the reader after writing your poetry and see it from their perspective. Its cool because their are like characters in it, but I don't quite get the meaning. Keep writing and you're sure to see as the reader :)

[Coyote Poetry]

The girls sound wonderful. Girls who enjoy ice cream and laughter are the one's we need to be our friends. A very good poem. I hope you show the poem to the girls. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Baz]

Sometimes writing is very personal, and while the reader may not directly relate ro the subject matter, the overall idea or emotion shines through. And I think this is one of those cases. Even though Nicole or Jessica are not known to me, I have 3 sons and I understand that children all have their own unique traits, most of which are only known to those who are closest to them. So in that sense, I think this poem is very nicely done.