The Sky Is The Limit

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I know that the sky is the limit,
But i am going to aim to the moon,
Because i am not giving up,
Not anytime and not this soon,
But I guess I am setting my hopes far too high,
Because after all of this it will end in a goodbye,
And I will be laying alone gazing up and counting each star,
While you have found happiness and I watch from afar.

And isn't it strange that there is only one heart broken,
And strange that there is only two eyes crying,
And as I take down the love letters from upon the shelf,
I sit and cry alone and I think to myself,
What does he do that I can't do?
Does he love you more than I could ever do?
Does he say the words you need to hear?
Does he protect you from your deepest fear?
Cause you know I did all of them things,
You know I did everything.

I know that the sky is the limit,
But i am going to aim to the moon,
Because i am not giving up,
Not anytime and not this soon,
But I guess I am setting my hopes far too high,
Because after all of this it will end in a goodbye,
And I will be laying alone gazing up and counting each star,
While you have found happiness and I watch from afar.

Now in my life there are three words never said again,
And four weeks ago I was never in any of this pain,
And as I read through our old messages and texts,
I wonder how it took so quick for you to move onto your next,
Does he hold you on your arms at night?
Does he protect you until the morning light?
Does he say that he loves you?
Does he say your love is true?
Cause you know I did all them things,
You know I did everything.

I know that the sky is the limit,
But i am going to aim to the moon,
Because i am not giving up,
Not anytime and not this soon,
But I guess I am setting my hopes far too high,
Because after all of this it will end in a goodbye,
And I will be laying alone gazing up and counting each star,
While you have found happiness and I watch from afar.

Reviews

[joeysick]

Hello! I run an Instagram account that promotes the work of others, I am in love with this piece and was wondering if I’d be able to post it *you will be credited of course*

[B30]

I know that the sky is the limit,
But i am going to aim to the moon,
Because i am not giving up,
Not anytime and not this soon,

These first four lines immediately got me drawn into this poem. Great way to start it. Is this like a song? It would fit perfectly :D

[Dr. Wood ?]

again this could do with a little tweaking here and there..Good poem just a few too many syllables in odd places...You do not need I AM...I'M will flow better in the second line..word rhythm is very important

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

This is beautiful, and extremely relatable! Great job with this, most people understand how it feels to be as you described in the poem, and you did a beautiful job of showing your emotions. Great write(:

&the sky is never the limit(:

[JiDonnelly]

This is simply adorable all of your work is so easy to relate to I would highly recommend to anybody who has loved and lost.
Beautifully written as ever, can't wait to shift this piece together, should be fun!

-Ji'

[DarrinReay]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you like it. we still need to do a co-write! :)
-DR.

[JiDonnelly]

We do, Get straight in touch when you come up with any ideas!
Again, Beautiful piece!

-Ji'

[DrD]

The theme is good, Darrin but your rhyming pattern gets a little confusing. I wonder as I read if you intended to say things like "them things" as a reflection of how a third party character speaks or is it an error? Please remember that I give reviews that represent my opinion and viewpoint and I never come here to "make points" so to speak. This work needs work but I am confident you can do it.

[DarrinReay]

Thank you, i welcome criticism! thank you for your review!