The Wanderer

When the words won't come anymore

and the days pass slowly by

and I pound against the door

as I start to kill my mind...

When the hour arises still

and I see all of the needs,

and I start to lose my will

as I look at all my deeds...

When I'm lost and hopeless, too

and my brain begins to crack,

and my heart is bleeding through

the shirt stuck on my back...

If I lose all of my power

and the words will never come,

and I spend all my hour

wading through all the scum...

If I find the place of silence

where words cannot pretend

to comfort all my violence...

Will you ever let me in?

'Cause I wander frozen wastelands

of my broken, desert mind.

And I find many misplaced plans

and I wish I could go blind.

'Cause the world is only broken.

And the silence makes me ponder.

So many thoughts unspoken,

as in the dark I wander.

Reviews

[Riley Justine]

You put writer's block to shame. I wish I could recover as well as you do. This is awesome!

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thank you riley :) just keep writing through it every tme

[Emily]

Very nice poem!
Well done!
Keep on writing!!

[Not here]

thanks :) and i will

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

The last stanza quite nice all alone.
dark days with thoughts on the demise.

[Not here]

thank you for reviewing josie :)

[Corbin Driver]

Great job on this poem. I like this one.

[Tamika Finley]

Just as the last reviewer, the last stanza was very powerful. I liked this poem a lot because these are the thoughts that it seems we all have while just lying in the dark. Good write.

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thank you :) and i liked that stanza alot mysefl.

[Mara]

Wow this is a great piece, i really like the last stanza

'Cause the world is only broken.
And the silence makes me ponder.
So many thoughts unspoken,
as in the dark I wander.

[Not here]

thank tee :) im really glad you liked it

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

man i know what the feels like! hope life calms down and allows you to take time to do what you do so well. As for the poem. I enjoyed the imagery and phasing, i feel like it to go really strong towards the end.

[Not here]

thank you crystal :) glad you enjoyed it and thanks alot for reviewing my stuff

[Meraki]

I can empathize with you, with this. Nice work

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thank you meraki :)

[closed]

this one is very ambient
your words pave a rather thick atmosphere ala a literary fog of sorts

one that the reader wades through to reach the theme

super somber
different from your more jovial pieces

looks like you tried something interesting here


i like it


-Dream

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thank you dream :) i really appreciate all your reviews

[closed]

no problem David
keep penning

youve got alot of fans

[Not here]

mainly thnks to you and cool girl

[Robert]

Writers block Dante we all have it one time or another. You know while reading this I could tell that you put thought and time into this piece. As a reader it read very well and had meaning, good job.

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thank you robert :) im glad you thought so