A Door, A Key, A Day

I just can't cope with this anymore.

I need some hope but you slammed the door.

I need the key but you threw it away.

I need your love that left yesterday.

I want a dream that does not bring fears.

I need a day that does not bring tears.

I hope for a sunset up in the sky

that I can look on without wishing to die.

I fell from cloud nine, landed hard,

hit the ground, shattered in shards.

I woke up in a foreign cage

that barely contained all my rage.

I just can't cope with this anymore.

I need some hope but you slammed the door.

I need the key but you threw it away.

I need your love that left yesterday.

Searching for peace on my knees again,

the glass heart broke and stabbed in my skin.

I want to remember what it feels like to bleed;

I'd rather feel pain than this numbness, I plead.

If the world must break let it land on me.

If the sky does fall, I promise not to flee.

And I realize every selfish doubt

and I think on what life's all about.

I can't even breath when you open the door

and you offer a hand to me down on the floor.

Then you hand me the key, and you whisk me away.

And you give me your love for the happiest day.

Author's Note

Don't really know how this came to mind, but it did. Hope you enjoy :)

Reviews

[Bear]

It appears to be a song lyric, you have a nice refrain and strong verses. It sounds more pop than rock unless you go full metal, the pounding drum beat would set a good tempo :~)

[Not here]

thank you Bear :) im not sure what it would be. im glad you liked it though lol

[ShadowWhysper]

Good rhyme and rhythm to this piece. :-)

Question though, is it the same person who slammed the door and took their love away that offered their hand at the end?

[Not here]

yes it was intended to be in my head, but it can be whatever you want it to be. and thank you :)

[ShadowWhysper]

I get it, I just wanted to be sure I was seeing it the way you intended. :-)

[Not here]

its alright :) it can mean whatever you need it to

[Gabriel Barksdale]

i love this :) each word seems perfectly placed

[Not here]

thank you very much gabriel :)

[Emily]

Very nice wording!!
Well done!!

[Not here]

thank you once again emily :)

[Willard Wells]

Nicely done piece on returned love. Happy endings are nice. Thanks for a well penned piece.

[Not here]

thank you willard :) and i need more happy endings in my poems

[Stan Lee]

I did enjoy. It was a great rhyme. I'm not sure that the title couldn't be improved. :) But the poem was very well done. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Not here]

the title could probably be improved but im too lazy :) thank you smiley face