The Shallow Tide

Just a bit

Sometimes you think that you are too complicated for them.

You're in college. Going to graduate in a year possibly. You see the line. You look back. 

I can never go back.

I can never be who I was before. 

Friends that you left behind don't seem to grow out of their heads necessarily. 

You expanded your mind by moving to another place. 

Though...

You sometimes wish. 

You hadn't. 

That you could live in the shallow tide with old friends. 

But now you're lost in an Ocean. 

Watching the same small fishes in the same small waves.

The small fish that you were. 

Now your swimming with the big fishes. 

Pretending that you are one of them. 

You sometimes wish. 

You hadn't. 

Reviews

[Timothy]

Wow great job! You are a big fish girl. Remember that! Sometime in the near future you should swim back to the shallow end and give this little fishy a few pointers.

[Acer]

Simple piece, beautiful write.

[Trigorin]

I like the simplicity of this piece. There's a mournful quality to it that would have been difficult to achieve if you had decided to elaborate more, and I am firmly of the belief that poems ought to leave more to the imagination. Minor note - line 14, that 'your' should be 'you're', but that really doesn't matter that much. I like what you were trying to do with this piece, and I think you succeeded - you create a definite image, and your word choice, while not altogether stunning, combines into a very soft, gentle mood. Good work.