Layers Of Me

a senryu

 

My heart might be big

But it still has a fault line

Actively running.

Reviews

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

A very small degree of hope is sufficient to cause the birth of love.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh so true :)

[Becky C Strukamp]

few words holding large truths. Words well written reminding us though our hearts are there and reach out, do not take it for granted, for it can be damaged. very nice write

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Amen to that.

[Ed Hart]

they all go by one name, and often in different directions...helava thing

[Dean Kuch®]

As Shrek said to the donkey..."NO! Layers. Onions have layers. Ogres have layers. Onions have layers. You get it? We both have layers. [walks off]
And the donkey replies..." Oh, you both have LAYERS. Oh. You know, not everybody like onions. What about cake? Everybody loves cake!..."

And everybody, well me anyway, really appreciates a well written senryu with a twist! And I loved this!
Nicely done...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks you sir, I appreciate that... oh and I love that part of Shrek.

[Dean Kuch®]

Hah, saw the onion, layers, well...you know.
You are most welcome!

[Anthem]

What a cool idea for a senryu. It's like a big onion but will still split if you expose it the to the right angle.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Great way of looking at it.

[Anthem]

you have a good knack for powerful 5-7-5's

[Kenneth The Poet]

Welcome of the San Andreas fault zone called love.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

No kidding there.

[Poetic Beauty]

I hear this

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks for listening :)

[Poetic Beauty]

Anytime