An Unseen Reason

Just a senryu

 

These tender moments

keep blocking my arteries

so my heart won’t bleed.

Reviews

[Britt]

I really like this. Short, but its good. ^_^

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you.

[Lily Mae]

I so love this..xo

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you wild one xo

[Frieda P]

Wow Dale, I really like this one, it says so much. Saved by tenderness... should be a rule or something. ;-) Kudos!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I agree with that statement whole heartedly.

[Circe]

wow.... saved by the tender joy of all that love can bring... amazing piece, Dale, truly, you astonish me.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you... I just write what I feel.

[Renée]

Oh Simplicity adds to the sweetness of this piece !

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank, I appreciate that thought... I always say the most sincere words are the simplest.

[.]

~ beautifully written...

~ beautifully said...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thnak you so much.

[.]

~ you're very welcome...

[SparrowSong]

We should all be so lucky to have our fair share of tender moments...well done, I really like this.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much.

[Epipsychologist]

This must have come from the heart.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

All poetry should come from the heart.

[KAOlmsted]

your second line has eight syllables...(IS THAT ALLOWED???) (I have no idea...) (I'm sure it's just an oversight) (Maybe he pronounces "arteries" "artries") (Who does that???) (Whatever; it's a good poem) (I know!)

Welcome to my brain ;-)

Good one, Dale.

[Marie]

"Arteries" can be pronounced with two syllables. Of course, the line could have been written: "keep blocking my arteries"; then it wouldn't matter.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

It does matter and thank you for catching that... I miscounted, this is why I am not an accountant.

[KAOlmsted]

(Now he's got a b*****d 's' at the end of keep) (Shhh...stop making trouble for poor Dale) (I know I know...I'm just saying) (You're going to drive him crazy!) (Okay...fine) (but yeah, he does have an 's' at the end of keep...) (Shhh!)

:-D

(You think just because you gave him a big smile he won't slap you silly??)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

These voices in my head are more level headed them myself, LOL

[KAOlmsted]

;-)