Rainy Day Reminders

The wet days make for an interesting muse.

 

The sound of footsteps

on wet concrete

sounds like ghosts

spooking my mind.

The water leaves no footprints

so the mystery remains

a voice from beyond the grave.

Trying to follow the sound

my feet become cold

from stepping in puddles,

or is it resonating

from the chill in my soul

creeping down my spine

like a spider’s web?

Did it bite me while

weaving its wicked design?

Cause I never felt the bite

but I sure do feel the sting

creating a black hole in my heart.

Has the poison thickened my blood?

for my legs feel as though

full of concrete

forcing me to stand still in the sun

while it dries up the rain

turning this haunting

into a sobering memory. 

Reviews

[Circe]

it's interesting how your mind escapes to its daydreams with the sound of rain and gazing into puddles of water that reflect and reflect.. the world is a moist sticky balloon and your legs are so heavy ... I like how the moods change with the weather, and so do your thoughts... was the spider ever there at all? lovely, intricate piece.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much... I am amazed where my mind goes sometimes, it is like a horse on land with no fences.

[Emerald Seas]

This has a really good flow to it. You use the rain and "drying out" wonderfully with your correlation to memories of a lost love. The last stanza really ties this piece together nicely!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much. Always nice hearing from you.

[PP]

Wow!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks... I hope that was a good WOW :)

[PP]

INDEED!!!!!!!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well thank you again.

[PP]

:)

[Relic]

All your poems are interesting to me no matter what the topic. Rain is a great topic and always one of my favorites, great poem.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you sir... rain is a certainly a great muse.

[Icelanna]

Very nice. Although I would suggest breaking it into stanza's and focussing on different aspect of the elements you mention as there is a lot going on. Work on your structure, that's all.
Hope this helps.
Love to you x

[Constance L. Hartwell]

I truly love the rain in all its glory!! You did an excellent job. Nice poem.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much.

[Bumble]

Lovely, lovely poem!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you.

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~ i agree with ed... this is absolutely exceptional... a very skillfully and powerfully etched piece of poetry... all the images and words in this piece are unbelievably alive... could almost actually hear your voice recite them...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much, I appreciate your words and time.

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~ you're very welcome, monsieur...

[Renée]

Oh my favorite weather ! So many stories in the wetness..Love the visual as I read....Chiling..and then a bit of warmth as reality returns...
Were you walking as you wrote this? Chilling write

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much, actually I was sitting at a Starbucks while people walked by in the puddles. Strange where inspiration comes from.

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

A metaphoric delight ..

Rain has taken many people to many places
Songs are written, reflecting our soggy souls
And the sun dries dreary thought
As we flow gently into another day's light ..

Good One ! .. Jazz

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Wow what a wonderfully poetic response. I love the rain and the smell it leaves afterwards.

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

So do I .. xx