The Truth About Consequences

I was talking to a friend the other day about how being hurt by love can make you hesitate to try again. That lead to this poem.

 

SIlver charms turn to bullets

At the sight of love

Coming onto view.

She knows its bite

All to well.

The red sea

Of her feelings

Has turned into flowing lava.

Many guys have lost

Their souls in the fire

Trying to light

The right flame.

But it will take a real man

With the patience

To cross the broken bridge

And chip away at the stone

Built around her heart.

Hopefully he will find her in time,

Before her castle of protection

Turns to an emotional tomb. 

Reviews

[written in blood]

very deep write!! missed a lot of them... need to catch up!!!.. Although I have to say that many women hurt have lost a part of themselves in that red sea!!!!.. *You just knew I had to give some defense to women too!! ! lol.. an excellent description of Heartache and Perseverance...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well this poem is new… I am not just talking bout women, it apples to men as well… I am a bit gun shy these days about love and relationships.

[written in blood]

ahahah I was teasing your bones!!! lol

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I see how you are… haven't changed a bit… and I am glad cause I like you as you are :)

[lee von cleef]

“Some nights in the midst of this loneliness I swung among the scattered stars at the end of the thin thread of faith alone.”
― Wendell Berry, Jayber Crow Goood Luck scoring a line to crack a heart of stone.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you for you interesting insight, always entertaining.

[poetdoug]

"Many men have lost their souls trying to light the flame in the fire.'
I love the creativity you have put into this dramatic subject. Good work my friend

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[DIVYA]

Awesome beginning! The poem is a gentle, beautiful reminder of what a broken heart does to us sometimes. The poem superbly underlines the need for perseverance and sensitivity on the part of the man to win her over.

I loved the conclusion you gave it!


Before her castle of protection
Turns to an emotional tomb


She's lucky to have such an understanding friend.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you… I was happy with the ending as well. I think the older we get the more we are effected by relationships.

[DIVYA]

I agree with you. Sadder is the fact that time is limited and everyone does not get that understanding and love that they deserve in the end. With the choices and options becoming fewer witb each passing day, loneliness becomes a harsh reality, staring in the face.

[Corset]

This one really makes me think of my reaction to a recent occurance and I see how I am allowing this reaction to color my thoughts, and give rise to some old pains and refections, " made me take a look from the outside , and I was amazed at how raw that emotion still is. Thank you for writing this wonderful poem Dale.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

It is always nice when someone relates to my work. I am still gun-shy from my divorce that occurred 6 years ago. I know subliminally it effects some decisions I make now.

[Corset]

same here, thank you.

[TL Boehm]

wow. isn't this the truth. Emotional walls do become tombs.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

That certain can if we let 'em… thank you

[Rita L. Sev]

It's so hard to let love in again, once burned. You make a good point about that becoming like a tomb - I have known people who do seem like a part of themselves has died. This is really well crafted, Dale.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You know what they say… "once bitten twice shy" Thank you for the kind review

[SyberRose]

Yes patience is a virtue...and you expressed it well...nicely done Dale...enjoyed as always...Rose:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much young lady

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Awesome powerful words:) I totally love the song on your bio so do lots more of my friend:) Life's a garden , dig it:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I like that about the garden… thank you for the review

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Yeah its pretty good say:) your very welcome:)

[Lydia Shutter]

After heartbreak, many put up a wall around their hearts. It is a protection device. I think as many men as women do this actually. It takes a caring and compassionate person to win back the trust and gain entrance to the heart after that. How beautifully you have expressed this. Lydi**

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh I know men too, I just said she in the poem… in fact I know I have a big wall up right now myself… thank you for the kind review.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

geez, my second ex..this reminds me so much of her...how shy and protective of herself after so much hurt, and the patience it took to gain her trust...

you express it so well.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you sir… I think we all dated someone like that. I know I have too.