A Familiar Darkness

 

A reborn shadow

Speaks in tongues

Leaving the voice of reason

To re-evaluate the price

Of Silence in its golden state.

The dark entity

Slips through iron bars

In hopes of escaping

The fate of a homestead cemetery

A second time around;

Hope is breathing fire

Trying to thaw its icy heart

In so allowing the feeling

Back into transparent fingertips;

For when hanging

By a thread

It will know when

The end is near.

This shadow knows

A fall into the abyss

Will go on and on

Passing through a familiar hell.

Without a soul to break its fall…

This darkened déjà vu

Has become a repeated penance.

Reviews

[ashesonfire]

I love the flow in this one! "A fall into the abyss" was my favorite line! Good wok :D

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[icelandicblue]

I couldn't help but think of Dante's Inferno except it is here on earth:

This shadow knows
A fall into the abyss
Will go on and on
Passing through a familiar hell.
Without a soul to break its fall…

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Interesting, you know I have never read that book, but now I might have to.

[Tina Louise UK]

Wonderfully dark...enjoyed :) x

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you :)) xoxo

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Very deep, interesting metaphor involving a shadow! A pleasure to read.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)]

my pleasure

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Every time i read your work i am left with a gaping jaw! This is such a step inside the dark corners of a soul, the last stanza is phenomenal...

A fall into the abyss
Will go on and on
passing through a familiar hell.

Feel that line to my core.... delightfully dazed by this this piece!

[Ghost of Jupiter]

haha, ooops Frieda i took your line...i didn't read your review until i posted ... i guess Cowboy you make both of us feel your work deep down to our cores... lol ;)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you kindly, I just speak from the experience of a crowded mind and mended heart. Glad to know my words can relate to others.

[Frieda P]

Holy cats Dale...I felt this darkly deja vu'd penance to my core. I spun it to fit my own head, and it flipped me right over...awe inspiring read my friend!!

100 dark entities

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Whoa… something that came from my head fit in yours, OMG you poor thing. Thank you very much for that amazing compliment.

[SimpleMind]

So dark.Made me sad at some point... might be because it's the harsh reality?
Wonderful write here my friend!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well reality is life and sometimes life can be harsh, most of the time we cause life to be harsh on us but blame others things or people instead of accepting the blame, thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this poem made me very uncomfortable...good job, Dale...because i think it is supposed to.

that voice of reason that tells us sometimes it is better to leave the words hanging...not spoken.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

An very interesting interpretation, I appreciate the feedback.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Those final 7 lines are brilliant... Excellent write over all, but you closed the show superbly!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much… I believe that the beginning and end are the most important parts of the poem.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Each component does have its own importance within the greater whole. You've applied that principle with great care in this piece.