Second Wind

I have not done a chofu in a couple years. For those of you not familiar with the form, it has six lines with a 5-2-7-5-2-7 syllable count. So thought I'd give it a shot again.

 

That first breeze really

Lifted

My spirit towards the blue sky,

But the second wind

Helped to

Breathe new life into my soul

 

Author's Note

I have not done a chofu in a couple years. For those of you not familiar with the form, it has six lines with a 5-2-7-5-2-7 syllable count. So thought I'd give it a shot again.

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

I like the form, not one I am familiar with. A beautiful, simple image that speaks of second chances...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thanks, it is not well known form, but it is a fun challenge… 6 lines with a 5-2-7-5-2-7 syllable count.

[Pryde Foltz]

A wonderful chofu, rock and roll. The line isolation gave the piece a meditative feel.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Really, glad to hear that… thank you very much.

[Corset]

How very beautiful, like a breath of fresh air on a spring day. ( thank you for pointing out structure for us, I wouldn't have recognized otherwise, love to learn new things) will want to try this form myself sometime soon :) hm, what this poem says to me, it feels like a break for sky, flying high and freefalling into new life, seasons maybe spring, maybe worries have been lifted, shifted, it feels light after a time of heavy lifting.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much, and I look forward to seeing you create one of these. With your talent I know you can do it.

[Corset]

Thank you for the vote of confidence R&R :)

[Dhaye]

Once there was a wind
So harsh
It never gave me comfort
It only made storms
A foe
That drove me close to the rain.

---"Once There Was A Wind"----Dhaye

Thanks, cowboy. I have crated a Chofu at this time. Your piece is a good motivator. =)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Wow that is really a cool chofu, nice going.

[Marie]

This is the second chofu I've read recently. It's beautiful.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much. I did them a lot a few years ago, it is my first new one in a long time.

[Renée]

.Love how you fit your thought into a chofu.. that is not easy to do.. This is a lovely piece !

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you, it is a fun challenge to say the least.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and the third wind?

I wanted more...but you do this style of poem quite well, my friend...uplifting.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

That third wind left a little stench in the air but was a nice relief, LO

Yhank you sir.

[Kasey Miriam]

Beautiful! I love this poem!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much :)

[Kasey Miriam]

You are welcome