Disappear Like A Shadow Beneath Midnight's Glare

Sometimes our humanity can't overcome our stupidity

There have been times in my life

That I let the mind rule the heart,

Most of them were man made disasters

And yet the aftermath of destruction

Was calculated risk that didn’t damage

The eye of my conscience.

 

Yet there were a few of these lapses

Of my emotional let downs

That became instants demons

That I wish I could exorcise,

But the weight of pain

I put on the bar is not only

Too much for me to lift,

But it also crushed the muscle

Of a loved one standing too close.

 

These are the times I want to disappear

Like a shadow beneath midnight's glare

So I don’t ruin the beauty of the sunrise. 

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Simply Beautiful dale.



I love how you painted your words.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece
and for your lovely review and comment you
left me.

I loved this last stanza's line.



These are the times I want to disappear

Like a shadow beneath midnight's glare

So I don’t ruin the beauty of the sunrise.



Blessings. kindred poet

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Awe thank you so much, your review flatters me.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're very welcome. it's my pleasure always. blessings. kindred poet

[David Scott]

A shadow dud spearing in the glaring power of darkness... Interesting poetry here Dale.
You always make me look at a topic from a new perspective.
Thank you for this enlightening write.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

thank you so much for that kind compliment.

[Madalyn Beck]

This is beautifully penned, Dale! I agree with my sis, raw and powerful, indeed! This is easy for many of us to relate to. Fantastic job expressing yourself. The ending verse blew me out of the water. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh really, wow that compliment gave me a huge smile on my face.
Thank you so much Maddy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i have been here many times...those regrets...times i just want to disappear...you wrote me...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you kindly sir, I think we all have them, the price of being human.

[Jennie Baron]

This is very beautiful and everything the other reviewers said. One tiny little picky thing, you have "exercise" where it should be "exorcise."

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you so much for the nice review and for catching that error.

[Jennie Baron]

Forgive me if I sound too much like your English teacher sometimes.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh no it is fine, I want to correct my silly errors, I appreciate it.

[s y e]

This is a feeling that way too many people know and relate to. A completely sad and emotional piece that tugs at my heart and I do hope this isn't how you're feeling right now. This tugged at my heart and ripped it open.

A raw, powerful piece full of emotions.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are right Sye, the older we get the mrs the mistakes build up, all part of being human. I appreciate your feedback :)

[AprilRN1210]

Oh my, what a sad, emotional piece that makes me just want to give you a hug... I feel such shame, regret, fear, pain, hopelessness, disgust... It just punches me straight in the gut and makes my heart ache for the writer... Deeply moving.

(one little suggestion, if I may).. you were in past tense so would it not sound better to say "that became instant demons/that I wish I could exercise"?

Powerful, raw, and emotive..... very nicely done sir... wheeew now I need something to lighten my heart...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much… although these are past emotional mistakes I can always use a hug :)
Thank you also for the suggestion.

[AprilRN1210]

hey, I'm always ready for a hug... you're welcome anytime...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

(((HUGS)))

[AprilRN1210]

back at ya bad boy!

[redzone]

Man do I know this feeling that you have expressed so well with those last few lines.... they haunt and twist your heart devoiding it of blood and hope.. I guess the answer/perhaps relief comes with deeply understanding and then changing the way you act and think... doesn't mean it still won't hurt, but it does mean we won't ruin those sunrises... really appreciated the way your poem read Dale....
~~redzone

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so kindly sir… I think we all eventually feel like this, it is the price of being human.