Death By Pride

Am i being direct or can you read between the lines? There is no wrong answer.

 

You left a wooden box

Outside my door

When I did not answer,

What you didn’t know

Was I could see you coming

A mile away,

But not with sight

Rather by the stench

Of rotting flesh burning my eyes

From those who were out of tune

With their power of intuition.

 

Who’s the fool now?

Not gauging how cunning

I can be,

I may not be the sharpest knife

In the drawer

But I will cut open your cloak

And expose all the bones

You forgot to hide in the closet,

Due to your arrogance.

 

Well I thank you for the gift

But I have no use

For a pine box now,

When you return

To see if I accepted your hospitality,

The only thing you’ll find

Is your head in the gutter

When I knock that chip off your shoulders

You call a brain.

Reviews

[Honey-Bee]

I find this poem rather humorous and I like it! I could see you coming a mile away but not with sight but rather with stench. Wow! When I knock that chip off your shoulder You call a brain. Interesting use of words here. Love it!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much, glad you enjoyed it, yes I did intend a little humor in my dark write.

[Marie Anzalone]

reminds me of some nasty business I had to tend to about 15 years ago. I have since learned to work through most differences. Subtlety can be a very destructive weapon when it is carefully and artfully honed. I find I, personally, have little use for bludgeons, though they seem to work well for others.

"Gaging" should be "Gauging." :-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much for your thoughts my friend.

[Marie Anzalone]

:-) you are welcome

[Matching Socks]

Sh!t, I'm not sure if I should laugh or run like fricking hell.
I loved this of course because you're so good at getting your feelings out, which I felt here. :)

The ending was funny, but not funny.
B!tch in a box... :) ok, it actually WAS funny.

I loved this poem.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you, yes I tried injecting humor while getting out old emotions.

[Matching Socks]

Well, I'd say mission accomplished. :)
B^+ch in a box... Reminds of that SNL skit now.
And so I'm laughing all over again.
This was good, priceless.

[Frieda P]

Ouch, were you having a bad day Dale....you certainly decimated whomever this was written for! An affecting read for sure....

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Not really a bad day, just taking old emotions out like the trash. Thank you so much Moonbeam for your review.

[Frieda P]

I love when you do scathing, my pleasure :-)

[Bright Ocean Star]

Oh, my....this one is angry. Pride is a nasty little problem many of us have. Very difficult to conquer, even with many trips to the confessional. It's one of those hidden things that you don't know about yourself to correct it unless you start looking in the first place. Great write, my friend.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

That is a very interesting way of looking at it, thanks for sharing your intelligent thoughts.

[Bright Ocean Star]

You are always welcome...:)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is cleverly written, Dale... I would not want to go toe to toe with you! lol

Absolutely gutting!... Nicely penned!~xoxo~:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you hon, I wouldn't want to up against you, I'd be casterated, LOL
Glad you liked it.

[Jennie Baron]

Very, very intelligently written and I like the defiant attitude.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you so much, defiant, that is me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i agree with april...no way i would want to be on your bad side...but then, i know this isn't about me, cause i never professed to having a brain.

powerful piece...of in your face poetry.

[AprilRN1210]

now now Jacob, you have to be one of the most clever, witty writers I have had the pleasure to meet on here, so hush with that nonsense.. and agree with you... thankfully we are on the right side of this fence:)

[AprilRN1210]

Remind me to stay on your good side jeez... I love the in your face attitude... Karma is a b@tch sometimes.. Don't have to be the sharpest knife in the drawer as long as your aim is precise and force deadly.. I'd say this poem is exactly that.. Direct and powerful.. nice job.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Oh thank you so much… you don't have to be the brightest when you know how to use the knowledge you have to your advantage.

[AprilRN1210]

You're welcome...